Puisi na28 Berjudul I Want to Live 4 Bait 18 Baris
Keaslian Ide
2
Elemen Kejutan
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Kekuatan Emosi
4
Kedalaman Makna
3
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I Want to Live
© na28
I want to live in my biggest dreams
I want to live with my fullest heart
Create every steps by myself
Save every hopes in my shelf
As the moon ready to set down
Even once, I want to feel like i wasn't on my own
Being loved
Being worth
And being proud
The sky still as blue as ocean
The gentle breeze still caress against my hand
Everything reminds me of the day that had left
How far the road I should take?
How hard the decision I should make?
World as mean as ever
But, I have life to live forever
Embrace each moment with gratitude
Until soon I found my infinitude
The poem ‘I Want to Live’ captures a yearning for fulfillment and self-discovery, emphasizing the desire for love, worth, and pride amidst life’s challenges. The language is simple and straightforward, yet it effectively conveys the poet’s emotional depth and longing for a more meaningful existence. However, the piece lacks originality in its themes and imagery, as it treads familiar territory without offering a fresh perspective. While the message is clear, it could benefit from more nuanced exploration of the complexities of human experience. Overall, a heartfelt expression of hope and perseverance, but falls short in terms of originality and depth.